Hm, could use some work.
Well although the submission itself wasn't bad, it could use some definate work. For one, the graphics in it are pretty bad, things like shading straight lines and more than one color are non-existent in this flash, and that would have helped a lot in this submission. The story itself wasn't that great ether, it didin't capture my attention and it was just plain imature, in my eyes. Overall this submission isn't that great and I didin't like, hell I don't know who would. What did you get on this anyway?